Relationships…the day after tomorrow

I posted part of the opening scene for a book I’ve been working on for…a while (I think I started it in 2007 and it’s still less than halfway through the first draft). This is the point where everything changes for the heroine and she has to overturn all her plans and get away from a bad situation rapidly heading for horrible.

I’m not sure I like it. She’s under a lot of stress and trying to think very quickly. As a result, she’s so emotionally shut down that it feels to me like it drags–and she doesn’t say much, either.

Let me know what you think. Do you sympathize with this woman? Is she interesting enough to read a whole book about? Should I cut the scene from the  book and just post it here as a teaser?

Thanks,

Val